From 98dbe53b498ebd044dfc7cf7a28d08e419fc1bec Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Adam Soltys <adam.soltys@pwgsc-tpsgc.gc.ca>
Date: Sun, 2 Dec 2012 16:15:38 -0800
Subject: Content

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 views/about.html | 17 ++++++++---------
 1 file changed, 8 insertions(+), 9 deletions(-)

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diff --git a/views/about.html b/views/about.html
index c7f5f45a..b021f8f2 100644
--- a/views/about.html
+++ b/views/about.html
@@ -13,18 +13,18 @@
     <p>
     Transactions between bitcoin addresses are 
     recorded in a public file and <a href="http://blockchain.info/unconfirmed-transactions">published on 
-    the Internet</a>.  This file called the block chain keeps track of what amounts are 
+    the Internet</a>.  This file is called the block chain and it keeps track of what amounts are 
     stored at what addresses.
     </p>
     
     About every 10 minutes, 50 new bitcoins are 
-    generated by a mathematical algorithm and distributed to people who 
+    generated and distributed proportionally to people that
     contribute computing power to the network. The 
-    <a href="http://bitcoin.org">software to participate in the network</a> is free and open source so anyone can run it on their computer.
+    <a href="http://bitcoin.org">software to participate</a> is free and open source so anyone can run it on their computer.
     </p>
 
     <p>
-    Over time, fewer and fewer 
+    The software has been designed so that over time, fewer and fewer 
     bitcoins will be created until there are a total of 
     21 million of them in circulation by the year 2040. Each bitcoin 
     is divisible up to 8 decimal places, making 
@@ -73,7 +73,7 @@
   <div class="span6">
     <h1>Where can I get some?</h1>
     <p>
-    Contact one of our trusted in-person <a href="/exchangers">exchangers</a>.
+    Contact one of our trusted <a href="/exchangers">exchangers</a>.
     </p>
 
     <p>
@@ -84,7 +84,7 @@
     </p>
 
     <p>
-    You can also use sites like <a href="http://localbitcoins.com/">Local Bitcoins</a>, <a href="http://bitcoinary.com/">Bitcoinary</a>, and <a href="http://bitcoin-otc.com/">Bitcoin OTC</a> to find people to trade with directly if you want to take your chances with strangers.
+    You can also use sites like <a href="http://localbitcoins.com/">Local Bitcoins</a>, <a href="http://bitcoinary.com/">Bitcoinary</a>, and <a href="http://bitcoin-otc.com/">Bitcoin OTC</a> to find people to trade with over the Internet if you want to take your chances with strangers.
     </p>
   </div>
 
@@ -128,9 +128,8 @@
     their best interest to avoid the transaction fees 
     charged by the credit card companies. Transaction 
     fees end up getting built into the prices we pay for 
-    goods and services across the board so we're 
-    indirectly subsidizing the big banks and credit card 
-    companies whether or not we personally use their services.
+    goods and services across the board so we're all
+    indirectly subsidizing the big banks and credit card companies.
     </p>
 
   </div>
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